EDEXCEL GCSE English Language Paper 1 | Walkthrough, Timings & How To Answer The 2024 GCSE Exam!

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摘要

TLDRThe video is a comprehensive guide aimed at helping students prepare for the 2021 Edexcel Language Paper 1 exam. It focuses on Section A and provides a walkthrough of how to address questions 1 to 4, which requires students to read, understand, and analyze a fiction extract. The guidance covers how to identify key elements, craft responses using a structured "point, evidence, explanation, link" format, and apply language and structure analysis effectively. Important techniques such as understanding context, engaging with text, and systematic answering are elaborated upon. Additionally, the video underscores the importance of balancing language with structural insights while focusing on power dynamics, character analysis, and thematic elements of the extract. It concludes by presenting how the shifts in narrative perspective can reflect deeper meanings and relationship dynamics.

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  • 📘 Comprehensive guide for the 2021 Edexcel Language Paper 1 exam.
  • 📝 Focused on Section A, questions 1 to 4.
  • 🧠 Emphasizes understanding and analyzing language and structure.
  • 🖋 Highlights importance of point, evidence, explanation, and link in responses.
  • 🔍 Guides on identifying key textual elements and context.
  • 📚 Offers model responses and structured answering techniques.
  • 🤔 Stresses balancing language insights with structural observations.
  • 🎓 Encourages practice using past papers and model answers.
  • 📖 Instructs on thematic and character analysis of the extract.
  • 🔄 Explores narrative shifts and their implications in relationship dynamics.

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  • 00:00:00 - 00:05:00

    The speaker introduces a walkthrough for answering the 2021 Edexcel English Language Paper 1 Exam. It highlights that Section A involves analyzing one text and answering four questions. The speaker plans to show how to write model responses for these questions while encouraging viewers to download a past paper for practice.

  • 00:05:00 - 00:10:00

    The text involves Sir Michael Audley, a rich baronet, proposing to Lucy, who is from a poorer background. There's a tension between social class differences and genuine love. The speaker reflects on pathetic fallacy in the text that suggests a dark mood and the dramatic reaction of Lucy which indicates her reluctance due to her poverty-stricken background.

  • 00:10:00 - 00:15:00

    Lucy's dialogue reveals her internal conflict about the marriage proposal. She flatters Sir Michael, acknowledges the practical benefits of marrying him due to her poverty but hesitates over concerns about love and sincerity. The speaker points out the power shift in dialogue, with Sir Michael, though in a socially higher position, appearing vulnerable and dependent on Lucy’s response.

  • 00:15:00 - 00:20:00

    The narrative demonstrates Sir Michael's internal struggle with the possibility that Lucy might reject him. This is illustrated through his silent moments and disappointed emotions despite Lucy's acceptance. The extract concludes with hints about Lucy's past and an unexplained ring, raising questions about her motivations and true feelings.

  • 00:20:00 - 00:28:48

    The speaker provides model answers for the exam questions. They analyze how language and structure depict Sir Michael's conflicting feelings and the shifting power dynamics with Lucy. Emphasis is placed on using techniques like dialogue, metaphors, and complex sentence structures to understand the characters' emotions and relationships. An in-depth approach is advised for achieving high marks.

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常见问题

  • What is covered in the walkthrough?

    The walkthrough covers answering questions 1 to 4 of Section A of the Edexcel Language Paper 1 exam, focusing on the 2021 paper.

  • What is the format of the Edexcel Language Paper 1 exam?

    Section A involves analyzing one text and answering four questions. Section B involves choosing between two imaginative writing tasks.

  • How is the walkthrough structured?

    The walkthrough provides a step-by-step guide, including reading and analyzing the text insert, and crafting model responses.

  • What are some key strategies for answering these exam questions?

    Key strategies include understanding the context, identifying language and structure techniques, and linking answers back to the question.

  • How many questions are covered in the walkthrough?

    The walkthrough covers four questions, from questions 1 to 4 in Section A.

  • What kind of text is provided in Section A?

    Students are given a fiction extract to analyze and answer questions about.

  • Where can students find the exam paper discussed in the walkthrough?

    A copy of the past paper can be downloaded for free via a link provided in the video description.

  • What does the video emphasize about writing model responses?

    The video emphasizes the importance of clearly analyzing language and structure, and structuring responses with point, evidence, explanation, and link.

  • What kind of writing task is in Section B of the exam?

    Section B involves imaginative writing, choosing between a statement or an image as a prompt.

  • How does the video help students practice for exams?

    The video provides model answers and encourages students to practice with the provided past paper and model responses.

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  • 00:00:02
    hello and welcome now no a number of you
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    guys who follow this channel are
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    actually sitting the Edexcel English
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    language and English Literature Exam
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    syllabus as opposed to AQA or the other
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    exam boards so what I wanted to do was
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    to offer you guys a complete walkthrough
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    of how to answer section A of the
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    language paper one exam and more
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    specifically I want to show you how you
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    can answer the 2021 Edexcel language
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    paper one exam and as I mentioned this
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    is going to be a complete walkthrough
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    for questions one to four so remember
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    when it comes to section A in the
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    edexole language paper one exam you
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    always get just one insert okay you're
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    given one text to look at and analyze
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    and also talk about an answer for the
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    first four questions before you move on
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    to section B which is the imaginative
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    writing question where you've got a
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    choice of two questions okay one of them
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    is just a statement the other is an
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    image you pick one don't do both and
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    then you answer the questions based on
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    that so what I wanted to do was to give
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    you guys a complete walkthrough of how
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    to answer the 2021 exam and if you do
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    want to also download a copy of this
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    past paper I've also included it in the
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    link below okay you can download it for
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    free and you can also use it if you want
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    to practice and apply some of this
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    information the model answers that I've
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    written to your own private practice
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    okay so let's get into how to answer
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    these questions okay I'm literally gonna
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    walk you through literally my thought
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    process as I read the insert and then of
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    course how you can write model responses
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    and what the model sponsors look like
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    for questions one two three and four
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    so let's tackle this language paper one
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    past paper so obviously remember that
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    you always get just one fiction extract
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    and then you've got to answer four
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    questions based on that and then your
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    fifth or sixth question okay so you get
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    a choice with imaginative writing you
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    then need to write a creative story or
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    something based on the image okay now
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    let's look at this extract okay the
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    insert that you are given and I'll kind
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    of walk you through my thought process
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    before reading this insert I'm not going
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    to start with the questions because I've
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    actually prepared these questions okay
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    so then I'm going to show you the actual
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    model responses that are prepared for
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    all four questions related to this
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    insert however what I want to do is
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    Begin by reading through this insert and
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    then diving into the responses for all
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    five questions now remember of course as
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    I mentioned you get one extract it's
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    made up it's a fiction extract
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    and then you need to read that with um
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    you know the questions in mind at the
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    back of your mind but also as you're
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    reading through it you're thinking okay
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    so what really stands out okay when
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    you're thinking about also language and
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    structure what stands out structurally
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    how we're supposed to feel as readers
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    okay so you're always given a blurb and
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    a little bit of context at the opening
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    of the extract okay in this case we're
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    told in this extract Sir Michael orderly
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    a rich baronet okay there's a star here
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    meaning that this is a word that the
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    examiners don't expect you to know what
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    it means so you are given the meaning
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    here so it's a title like a lord
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    indicating his rich and a man in high
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    position in society okay so here going
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    back to this in the section Sir Michael
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    audlia Rich baronet has just asked Lucy
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    another character to marry him he has
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    fallen in love with her despite the fact
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    that she comes from a poorer background
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    and as much younger than him he wants
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    her to marry him for love not for his
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    wealth and his place in society so this
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    is interesting this is kind of I guess a
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    story about class about this man who is
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    evidently quite Rich whilst he hopes
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    that this woman that he's in love with
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    um loves him back not based on his money
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    but actually she generally loves him so
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    uh this is the name of the book lady
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    orderly secret Mary Elizabeth Braden
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    okay so this is the surname of the
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    author when you're writing about the
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    author or the writer effect you could
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    either say the writer the author or you
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    can refer to their surname never the
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    first name but their surname so let's
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    have a look
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    she did not remove her gaze from the
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    darkening Countryside but so for some
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    moments was quite silent interesting
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    pathetic fallacy from the opening okay
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    so pathetic fallacy here it's darkening
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    is it supposed to establish a negative
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    mood
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    then turning to him with a sudden
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    passion in her manner that lighted up
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    her face with a new and wonderful Beauty
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    which the baronet perceived even in the
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    glowing growing Twilight she fell on her
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    knees at his feet okay so this is a very
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    dramatic reaction and again pathetic
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    fallacy is mentioned twice darkening
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    Countryside but also this idea of
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    Twilight this weird time during the day
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    where it's kind of dark but also not too
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    dark okay kind of like 4 or 5 p.m in the
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    evening so here she's thinking this
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    woman okay so presumably Lucy she's
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    thinking and then she's reacting really
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    really dramatically to um you know maybe
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    what she's been told
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    no Lucy no no he cried
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    vehemently not hair not hair again
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    vehemently is another new word so you
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    just quickly look at the glossary
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    vehemently means speaking with passion
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    and intensity
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    not hair not hair
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    yes hair hair she said the strange
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    passion which agitated her making her
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    voice sound shrill and piercing not loud
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    but distinct here and nowhere else how
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    good you are how Noble how generous so
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    here she's basically speaking in a very
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    assertive way and she's also flattering
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    this guy
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    love you why the women 100 times my
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    superiors and beauty and in goodness who
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    might love you dearly but you ask too
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    much of me interesting so she's saying
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    um you're asking too much of me again
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    presumably maybe she's saying oh
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    um you want me to marry you that's
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    asking too much
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    remember what my life has been only
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    remember that from my very babyhood I've
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    never seen anything but poverty so she's
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    telling him that she's always being poor
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    my father was a gentleman clever
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    accomplished handsome but poor and what
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    a pitiful wretch poverty made of him my
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    mother but don't do not let me speak of
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    her poverty trials and vexations again
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    vexations is another word that we're not
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    supposed to be familiar with it means
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    worries so she's basically saying that
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    her parents as well as her struggled
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    with poverty since she was a baby
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    poverty trials vexations humiliations
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    deprivations
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    you cannot tell you who are among those
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    for whom life is so smooth and easy you
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    can never guess what is endured by such
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    as we do not ask too much of me then I
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    cannot be disinterested
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    I cannot be blind to the advantages of
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    such a marriage I cannot I cannot so
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    she's basically saying look I understand
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    that you know you're quite rich and
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    someone like me who's really poor I
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    literally you know it would be a massive
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    advantage to me to marry you but what
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    she's basically saying here and this is
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    what I'd be thinking as I'm reading
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    through this is she's kind of reluctant
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    to marry him because she feels like
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    maybe he's too good for her
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    Beyond her agitation and a passion
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    passionate vehements there is an
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    undefined something in her manner which
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    fills the baronet with a vague alarm so
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    the baronet is like oh she can accept my
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    proposal
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    she is still on the ground at his feet
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    crouching rather than kneeling
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    her thin white dress cling about her her
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    pale hair streaming over her shoulders
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    her great blue eyes glittering in the
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    dusk more pathetic fallacy and her hands
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    clutching at the black ribbon around her
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    throat as if it had been strangling her
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    do not ask too much of me she kept
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    repeating so she's basically saying look
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    you're asking too much of Me by asking
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    me to marry you I've been selfish for my
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    babyhood
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    Lucy Lucy speak plainly do you dislike
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    me so here we can see that there's it's
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    really interesting so even if Lucy
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    initially falls on her knees basically
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    kind of begging him and an issue we
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    think that okay so there's a clear power
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    difference between them okay so Lucy's
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    the one that's kind of begging him
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    actually she's the one that seems to be
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    having way more power than this baronet
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    because he's now speaking and he's like
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    oh my gosh do you like me okay so this
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    is shown through this dialogue just like
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    you no no but is there anyone else whom
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    you love she laughed aloud at this
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    question I do not love anyone else in
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    this world she answered he was glad of
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    her reply and yet that and the strange
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    laugh Jarred upon his feelings so here
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    we can now see that the baronet this guy
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    Sir Michael Audley is desperate for her
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    to just give him something more please
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    tell me that you like me okay so here
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    there's an interesting power shift
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    that's very subtle
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    he was silent for some moments and then
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    said with the kind of effort well Lucy I
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    will not ask too much of you I dare say
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    I'm an old romantic fool but if you do
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    not dislike me and if you do not love
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    anyone else I see no reason why we
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    should not make a very happy couple is
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    it a bargain Lucy so here he's begging
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    her he's basically saying look I'm old
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    you know I understand that maybe I'm not
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    as sprightly and as handsome as some of
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    these other guys that you'll you know
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    that might be after you but I really
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    want you to marry me again we can see
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    that he's kind of been reduced to
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    position of begging even if she's the
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    one that's on her knees okay so there's
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    um the author is kind of reversing some
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    of our assumptions
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    yes the baronet lifted her in her arms
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    and kissed her once upon the forehead
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    then quietly bitten her good night he
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    walked straight out of the house so she
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    gives him a very brief monosyllabic
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    response she's not like you know she
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    doesn't seem extremely excited about
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    marrying this really rich guy who's
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    clearly gonna change her social status
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    and her position in society
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    he walked straight out of the house this
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    foolish old man because there was some
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    strong emotion at work in his wrist
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    neither Joy nor Triumph but something
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    almost akin to disappointment some
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    stifled and unsatisfied longing which
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    lay heavy and dull in his heart as if he
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    had carried a corpse in his bosom so
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    this is an interesting simile he even if
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    she says yes he kind of still doesn't
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    feel convinced and he feels like almost
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    these feelings of Happiness are dead in
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    his heart
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    he carried the corpse alliteration of
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    that hope which had died at the sound of
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    Lucy's words there's a lot of death
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    imagery here and it's the death of his
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    hope he's basically like oh I don't know
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    if she likes me
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    all the doubts and fears and timid
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    aspirations were ended now he must be
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    contented like other men of his age to
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    be married for his fortune and his
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    position so he's basically realizing
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    maybe she doesn't really like me
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    genuinely and even if she's saying yes I
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    don't know whether she actually
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    genuinely likes me for who I am
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    Lucy Graham went slowly up the stairs to
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    her little room at the top of the house
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    she placed her dim Candle on the chest
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    of drawers and seated herself on the
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    edge of the white bed still and white as
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    the draperies hanging around her so now
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    we're left focusing in and zooming in on
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    Lucy
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    no more dependents no more drudgery no
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    more humiliation so he's now thinking
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    about actually now I'm gonna marry this
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    guy I don't have to endure all of these
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    terrible things I tend to have to put up
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    with because I'm poor
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    every trace of the old life melted away
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    every clue to Identity buried and
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    forgotten except these except these
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    she'll never taken a left hand from the
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    black ribbon at her throat she drew it
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    from a bosom and now she spoke looked at
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    the object attached to it okay
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    interesting there's an object attached
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    to this black ribbon around her throat
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    it was neither a locket a miniature nor
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    a cross it was a ring wrapped in an
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    oblong piece of paper the paper partly
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    written partly printed yellow with age
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    and crumpled with much folding so this
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    final bit here is interesting in the
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    sense that she looks at this ring and we
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    wonder okay
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    um it seems like maybe was she reluctant
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    because this ring is perhaps attached to
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    somebody else who she really wanted to
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    marry or is this ring related to you
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    know maybe someone who should made a
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    promise and she kind of feels terrible
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    about breaking this promise we don't
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    know but this ending is interesting and
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    of course this extract what I'd be
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    thinking of is we can see here at first
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    we think that it's Lucy that has all of
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    the um or rather it's Sir Michael
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    orderly the rich guy he has all of the
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    power but actually and it's even
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    emphasized by the fact that Lucy you
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    know is begging him on her knees and
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    also it's emphasized by the fact that
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    she emphasis she talks about how poor
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    she is however as the passage progresses
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    we actually see that he really really
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    wants to marry her okay there's this
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    shift in power actually it seems like
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    it's Lucy who's like okay yes she speaks
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    in very monosyllabic way and he still
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    lives in a very uncertain sense okay so
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    there's also also maybe uh um
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    miscommunication between the two of them
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    okay so we can also see that maybe
  • 00:12:29
    they're not quite good at communicating
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    quite clearly so obviously we can see
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    towards the end she definitely is happy
  • 00:12:34
    to marry him
  • 00:12:36
    however she's also contemplating this
  • 00:12:39
    ring so we we're kind of left on a bit
  • 00:12:40
    of a cliffhanger wondering oh actually
  • 00:12:42
    is this ring belonging to somebody else
  • 00:12:43
    has she made a promise to somebody else
  • 00:12:45
    we don't know okay so as I mentioned
  • 00:12:47
    this is the insert that goes with this
  • 00:12:49
    paper and let's have a look at the
  • 00:12:53
    answers the model responses are prepared
  • 00:12:55
    for this particular exam paper Okay so
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    let's start with question number one
  • 00:12:59
    which is nice and brief worth one Mark
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    we'll ask the cat lines one to four and
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    identify a word or phrase that shows
  • 00:13:06
    that the extract takes place as the Sun
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    is setting as I mentioned there's lots
  • 00:13:09
    of pathetic fallacy and here we've got
  • 00:13:11
    darkening Countryside as well as top
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    Twilight so I just decided to select
  • 00:13:14
    darkening Countryside that's really it
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    when it comes to answering this question
  • 00:13:18
    number one but let's have a look at
  • 00:13:20
    question number two so here you also
  • 00:13:21
    look at lines 10 to 14 okay so basically
  • 00:13:25
    around this part of the extract and
  • 00:13:30
    you're asked to discuss or to mention
  • 00:13:33
    two things that the reader learns about
  • 00:13:34
    Lucy's early life so this has been
  • 00:13:36
    basically where she's talking about you
  • 00:13:38
    know how difficult her early life was
  • 00:13:40
    she's talking about also her dad her mom
  • 00:13:43
    and how just their lives were you know
  • 00:13:45
    their lives were really really difficult
  • 00:13:46
    as a result of their poverty so again
  • 00:13:49
    keeping question number two fairly brief
  • 00:13:51
    as is just worth two Marks here you're
  • 00:13:54
    asked to either use your own words or
  • 00:13:56
    quotations so I've decided to use my own
  • 00:13:58
    words she was really poor and her father
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    struggled with poverty and that's really
  • 00:14:02
    it for questions one and two so let's
  • 00:14:04
    move on to look at my response for
  • 00:14:06
    question number three
  • 00:14:07
    so let's look at how to answer question
  • 00:14:09
    number three this is the language and
  • 00:14:11
    structure question firstly make sure you
  • 00:14:13
    are extremely crystal clear on the
  • 00:14:15
    difference between language and
  • 00:14:16
    structure okay if you're not clear on
  • 00:14:17
    all the different language techniques
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    and structural techniques I suggest you
  • 00:14:20
    watch the video or I'll go over this
  • 00:14:21
    okay but remember language relates to
  • 00:14:23
    stuff like just the basic building
  • 00:14:24
    blocks of language and English Okay
  • 00:14:26
    nouns verbs adjectives adverbs but also
  • 00:14:30
    language techniques like similes
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    metaphor alliteration pathetic fallacy
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    structure relates to for example how
  • 00:14:36
    there's a um extract to begin how is it
  • 00:14:39
    like in the middle how does it end
  • 00:14:40
    structure also relates to things like
  • 00:14:43
    sentence types it relates to things like
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    repetition and listing okay so let's
  • 00:14:48
    have a look at this and of course in
  • 00:14:49
    this instance you asked to look at just
  • 00:14:51
    lines 28 to 42 and as I mentioned I've
  • 00:14:54
    actually pre-prepared this so what I
  • 00:14:56
    want to do is just walk you through this
  • 00:14:57
    okay so it's basically from here within
  • 00:15:00
    the extract all the way to
  • 00:15:03
    line 42. so this paragraph Okay so we're
  • 00:15:09
    asked to talk about how the white uses
  • 00:15:11
    language and structure to show Sir
  • 00:15:14
    Michael's thoughts and feelings about
  • 00:15:15
    Lucian as I mentioned here literally I
  • 00:15:18
    would suggest have two paragraphs two
  • 00:15:20
    pill paragraphs one language and one
  • 00:15:23
    structure as this is worth just six
  • 00:15:24
    marks so let's have a look
  • 00:15:26
    firstly so Michael appears to have
  • 00:15:28
    conflicting thoughts and feelings about
  • 00:15:30
    Lucy whilst he is elated happy to
  • 00:15:34
    discover that she has no other male
  • 00:15:35
    suitors so no other men who want to
  • 00:15:37
    marry her
  • 00:15:39
    he seems dejected which means sad that
  • 00:15:42
    she does not match his emotional
  • 00:15:43
    intensity okay that's my opening point
  • 00:15:46
    where you're writing an opening Point
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    try to
  • 00:15:49
    um write more than one sentence and of
  • 00:15:51
    course making it clear that you're
  • 00:15:52
    relating it back to the keywords in the
  • 00:15:54
    question which as I mentioned try to
  • 00:15:56
    highlight here and then know what you're
  • 00:15:58
    going for okay this is my opening point
  • 00:15:59
    I'm basically saying that so Michael is
  • 00:16:01
    sad he's dejected okay
  • 00:16:04
    here's my evidence he is both glad of
  • 00:16:06
    her reply and jot that's my evidence
  • 00:16:08
    I've embedded two little bits of
  • 00:16:10
    evidence here the contradictory
  • 00:16:13
    adjectives the opposite adjectives
  • 00:16:15
    language glad and Jarred indicate he
  • 00:16:19
    feels confused by her he feels strongly
  • 00:16:22
    for Lucy hence he may sense that her
  • 00:16:24
    emotions do not match his this is my
  • 00:16:27
    explanation where I'm talking about
  • 00:16:29
    language techniques adjectives and how
  • 00:16:32
    we can see Sir Michael's thoughts and
  • 00:16:34
    feelings about Lucy are being emphasized
  • 00:16:36
    so that's my language point now linking
  • 00:16:38
    back to the question thus it's clear
  • 00:16:40
    that Sir Michael's thoughts and feelings
  • 00:16:41
    about Lucy clash as he has mixed
  • 00:16:44
    emotions okay that's my opening peel
  • 00:16:47
    paragraph and I've talked about language
  • 00:16:49
    however I need to also balance this
  • 00:16:53
    discussion with structure so this is now
  • 00:16:54
    where I'm going to talk about it in my
  • 00:16:56
    second pill paragraph
  • 00:16:58
    additionally he holds pessimistic
  • 00:17:00
    thoughts and feelings about Lucy as he
  • 00:17:02
    appears to doubt her commitment he seems
  • 00:17:04
    uncertain as he leaves her again this is
  • 00:17:07
    my opening Point as you can see I've
  • 00:17:08
    added two sentences in fact he carried
  • 00:17:11
    the corpse of Hope as he left her this
  • 00:17:15
    is my evidence of embedded the quotation
  • 00:17:17
    this complex sentence structure vividly
  • 00:17:20
    conveys the death of Sir Michael's hopes
  • 00:17:22
    as he seems uncertain as to whether Lucy
  • 00:17:25
    will require his love whether she's
  • 00:17:26
    going to return his love
  • 00:17:29
    Braden's use of a metaphors have also
  • 00:17:32
    mixed in a little bit of language okay
  • 00:17:34
    you don't always have to just keep it
  • 00:17:35
    strictly to language and structure you
  • 00:17:37
    can also mix it up as I've done here but
  • 00:17:39
    make sure you always mention language
  • 00:17:41
    and structure in your paragraphs so that
  • 00:17:44
    you can be answering both parts of the
  • 00:17:46
    question so Brandon's uses a metaphor
  • 00:17:48
    alluding to a corpse indicates that
  • 00:17:50
    Michael is resigned as he senses Lucy
  • 00:17:52
    May reject him when he next sees her
  • 00:17:54
    that's my explanation consequently or
  • 00:17:58
    rather I've actually repeated
  • 00:17:59
    consequently okay so consequently it's
  • 00:18:01
    evident that Sir Michael is despairing
  • 00:18:03
    he's sad his thoughts and feelings about
  • 00:18:05
    Lucy are cynical as he may not know
  • 00:18:08
    where he stands with her so that's my
  • 00:18:11
    link back to the question one basically
  • 00:18:12
    saying how Sir Michael feels about Lucy
  • 00:18:16
    he feels like you know maybe she's
  • 00:18:17
    rejecting him he doesn't he feels like
  • 00:18:19
    quite negative towards how she feels
  • 00:18:22
    about him he he's kind of like left on
  • 00:18:24
    tender hooks a little bit okay he's not
  • 00:18:25
    sure so that's really how to answer
  • 00:18:27
    question number three go for two people
  • 00:18:29
    paragraphs if it's easier keep one
  • 00:18:31
    strict kitchen language one strictly to
  • 00:18:33
    structure you can mix both but make sure
  • 00:18:34
    you always mention language and
  • 00:18:36
    structure otherwise you're not answering
  • 00:18:38
    the full question and you're not going
  • 00:18:39
    to give yourself access or the
  • 00:18:41
    opportunity to answer it in forward in a
  • 00:18:43
    way where you're going to get the full
  • 00:18:44
    marks okay the four six marks
  • 00:18:48
    let's look at how to approach question
  • 00:18:49
    number four so in this question which is
  • 00:18:52
    worth 15 marks you're asked to talk
  • 00:18:55
    about or rather this is the evaluation
  • 00:18:57
    question okay you're asked to evaluate
  • 00:18:59
    whatever statement you're given okay so
  • 00:19:02
    as we can see in this question you're
  • 00:19:03
    told and this extract is an attempt to
  • 00:19:05
    show the relationship between Lucy and
  • 00:19:07
    Sir Michael okay keywords is what's the
  • 00:19:09
    relationship like Lucy and Sir Michael
  • 00:19:11
    evaluate how successful this is achieved
  • 00:19:14
    remember evaluation means you're firstly
  • 00:19:16
    saying how successful is the author in
  • 00:19:18
    showing this relationship between Lucy
  • 00:19:19
    and son Michael I would say it's not an
  • 00:19:21
    argument to say the author does this
  • 00:19:22
    effectively but also when you're
  • 00:19:24
    evaluating you're talking about it in
  • 00:19:26
    relation to language and structure I
  • 00:19:27
    keep on talking about language and
  • 00:19:28
    structure it's really important to know
  • 00:19:29
    the distinction between the two because
  • 00:19:31
    it also applies not only to question
  • 00:19:33
    number three but also question number
  • 00:19:34
    four this evaluation question so let's
  • 00:19:37
    have a look at how I've approached it
  • 00:19:39
    okay
  • 00:19:40
    so as you can see here for this 15
  • 00:19:42
    marker I actually start with an
  • 00:19:44
    introduction in terms of how the
  • 00:19:46
    relationship between Lucy and Sir
  • 00:19:47
    Michael is shown to just sum it up okay
  • 00:19:49
    see interest and conclusions is not
  • 00:19:51
    completely essential to your essay
  • 00:19:53
    however it's almost like the icing on
  • 00:19:55
    the cake okay you're kind of tying a bow
  • 00:19:57
    and really bringing this to your
  • 00:19:58
    examiner and showing look I have like a
  • 00:20:00
    really strong handle of this extract so
  • 00:20:03
    let's look at the introduction
  • 00:20:04
    the extract depicts an intriguing
  • 00:20:06
    relationship dynamic between Lucy and
  • 00:20:08
    Sir Michael at first they appear to
  • 00:20:10
    follow what we would expect as Lucy
  • 00:20:12
    seems weaker and subservient to so my
  • 00:20:14
    course observient means obedient given
  • 00:20:17
    her lower status yet by the end the
  • 00:20:19
    power appears to shift to Lucy as Sir
  • 00:20:21
    Michael's hope seem pinned on her
  • 00:20:23
    decision this goes back to what I was
  • 00:20:24
    talking about with this extract where at
  • 00:20:26
    first Lucy seems to be kind of um on her
  • 00:20:29
    knees she is the one that's poorer but
  • 00:20:32
    actually as a passage progresses it
  • 00:20:33
    seems like he's the one who actually is
  • 00:20:36
    really desperate for her um attention
  • 00:20:38
    he's the one that's desperate for her
  • 00:20:40
    approval okay and that's literally what
  • 00:20:42
    of summarized hair okay that's already
  • 00:20:44
    adding some analytical depth in my
  • 00:20:47
    response let's look at the first peel
  • 00:20:49
    paragraph remember all my paragraphs
  • 00:20:51
    always structure them as Point evidence
  • 00:20:52
    explanation link so let's have a look
  • 00:20:55
    at the opening of the extract Lucy looks
  • 00:20:57
    subservient again obedient as she kneels
  • 00:20:59
    before Sir Michael her physical kneeling
  • 00:21:01
    clearly indicates her lower social
  • 00:21:03
    status and we assume Sir Michael
  • 00:21:05
    controls this relationship that's my
  • 00:21:06
    opening Point relating it back to the
  • 00:21:08
    keywords in the question remember and
  • 00:21:10
    note how much I use these keywords it's
  • 00:21:13
    not you're not over repeating yourself
  • 00:21:15
    when you're repeating some of these
  • 00:21:16
    keywords you really clearly indicating
  • 00:21:18
    the examiner I understand what this
  • 00:21:20
    assignment has asked me to do
  • 00:21:22
    in fact she fell on her knees yet sir
  • 00:21:25
    Michael commanded no Lucy no that's my
  • 00:21:27
    evidence and hair actually in my
  • 00:21:30
    evidence I am juxtaposing two different
  • 00:21:33
    bits okay she fell on her knees but also
  • 00:21:35
    when he basically said no Lucy no
  • 00:21:37
    because when you're writing about these
  • 00:21:39
    characters and talking about like their
  • 00:21:40
    relationship sometimes a powerful way to
  • 00:21:42
    do this is to talk about what does one
  • 00:21:43
    character say versus what does another
  • 00:21:45
    character say okay that's what I've done
  • 00:21:47
    the verb feel reveals to us how Meek and
  • 00:21:50
    deferential Lucy is as you can see I'm
  • 00:21:52
    using ambitious language deferential
  • 00:21:54
    obedient Meek means like kind of calm a
  • 00:21:57
    little bit shy
  • 00:21:58
    moreover Sir Michael's emphatic
  • 00:22:01
    repetition of no repetition structure
  • 00:22:04
    so I've used language verb and now
  • 00:22:06
    repetition structure shows he is used to
  • 00:22:09
    commanding her
  • 00:22:10
    from the outset of the extract from the
  • 00:22:12
    start of the extract whereas readers get
  • 00:22:14
    the impression that Sir Michael controls
  • 00:22:15
    and dominates their relationship as you
  • 00:22:17
    can see here in my explanation I've
  • 00:22:19
    talked about language verb structure
  • 00:22:22
    repetition but also I've then emphasized
  • 00:22:25
    and analyzed what does this show about
  • 00:22:27
    Lucy and Sir Michael what I'm saying
  • 00:22:28
    here is that actually it seems like Lucy
  • 00:22:30
    at first she's used to being obedient
  • 00:22:32
    she's just being the servant and so
  • 00:22:34
    Michael also the way he speaks to her
  • 00:22:36
    he's just basically instructing her
  • 00:22:37
    telling her what to do now linking back
  • 00:22:39
    to the question hence
  • 00:22:41
    going to the next page
  • 00:22:44
    Braden so I can say the author the
  • 00:22:46
    writer or the surname so in this case
  • 00:22:49
    I've decided to use her surname Braden
  • 00:22:51
    successfully depicts a vast power
  • 00:22:53
    difference in Lucy and Sir Michael's
  • 00:22:55
    relationship at first we get the
  • 00:22:57
    impression that Lucy is quite powerless
  • 00:22:59
    this is my link back to the question now
  • 00:23:02
    here's my second peel paragraph
  • 00:23:05
    nonetheless as the extract progresses
  • 00:23:07
    there seems to be a shift in their
  • 00:23:09
    relationship we've gradually discovered
  • 00:23:10
    that so Michael is desperate to marry
  • 00:23:12
    Lucy and he's very
  • 00:23:15
    self-deprecating self-deprecating means
  • 00:23:17
    like you know um you're almost like
  • 00:23:19
    making fun of yourself in order to make
  • 00:23:21
    yourself more likeable to someone else
  • 00:23:22
    okay you're kind of putting yourself
  • 00:23:23
    down so this is my second opening point
  • 00:23:26
    I'm working through the extract okay so
  • 00:23:28
    I started off here I'm now working
  • 00:23:30
    through the extract
  • 00:23:33
    he wonders
  • 00:23:35
    do you dislike me yet Lucy reassures him
  • 00:23:37
    by affirming dislike you no no here's my
  • 00:23:40
    evidence again I'm juxtaposing what he
  • 00:23:42
    says versus what Lucy says look at my
  • 00:23:44
    explanation
  • 00:23:45
    however so Michael is still unsure and
  • 00:23:47
    he calls himself a romantic thought in
  • 00:23:50
    fact actually I've added three separate
  • 00:23:51
    bits of evidence you've got he asked you
  • 00:23:53
    just like me she then says just like you
  • 00:23:55
    know and then this is a third bit of
  • 00:23:56
    evidence a romantic fool so here's my
  • 00:23:59
    evidence now let's look at my
  • 00:24:00
    explanation
  • 00:24:02
    Braden's use of dialogue okay so this is
  • 00:24:05
    technique dialogue is effective in
  • 00:24:07
    Shifting The Power Balance
  • 00:24:09
    so Michael seems insecure and uncertain
  • 00:24:12
    and although Braden employs High
  • 00:24:15
    performer in Lucy's reply remember hyper
  • 00:24:17
    4 is when you ask a question and
  • 00:24:18
    immediately answer it
  • 00:24:20
    so although Brighton employs High
  • 00:24:22
    Performance and Lucy's reply to convey
  • 00:24:24
    her interest the adjective old shows us
  • 00:24:27
    some Michael thinks he is not good
  • 00:24:29
    enough for Lucy just be clear by the way
  • 00:24:31
    high performer is Lucy she asked dislike
  • 00:24:33
    you that's the question then she
  • 00:24:35
    immediately answered it no no okay
  • 00:24:36
    that's a structural technique
  • 00:24:38
    the shift surprises us because Lucy has
  • 00:24:41
    so much to gain from this marriage
  • 00:24:44
    that's my explanation talked about
  • 00:24:47
    dialogue talked about her before I've
  • 00:24:50
    also mentioned adjectives so this is
  • 00:24:52
    really heavy in both language and
  • 00:24:53
    structure analysis this is my
  • 00:24:55
    explanation now linking back to the
  • 00:24:56
    question
  • 00:24:57
    thus the author shows Lucy and Sir
  • 00:25:00
    Michael's relationship changes Lucy
  • 00:25:02
    appears to wield to hold far more power
  • 00:25:05
    as Sir Michael begs her to love and
  • 00:25:08
    marry him that's my second peel
  • 00:25:10
    paragraph let's have a look at my third
  • 00:25:12
    pill point
  • 00:25:13
    furthermore Lucia pierced to accept his
  • 00:25:15
    proposal yet her lack lost a reply
  • 00:25:17
    reveals so Michael loves her more than
  • 00:25:19
    she loves him in their relationship
  • 00:25:20
    lackluster means there's not that much
  • 00:25:22
    enthusiasm
  • 00:25:24
    so Michael Speaks continuously as he
  • 00:25:26
    tries to justify how they would make a
  • 00:25:28
    very happy couple so that's my opening
  • 00:25:30
    point this is my evidence now this is my
  • 00:25:32
    explanation oh actually this is even a
  • 00:25:34
    bit more of evidence nonetheless Lucy
  • 00:25:36
    simply replies yes okay so Sir Michael
  • 00:25:38
    he says evidence one they can make a
  • 00:25:40
    very happy couple but Lucy replies yes
  • 00:25:43
    Brandon depicts Sir Michael speaking in
  • 00:25:46
    a complex sentence this contrasts Lucy's
  • 00:25:48
    monosyllabic reply where's readers can
  • 00:25:50
    see that Sir Michael is extremely
  • 00:25:51
    committed to Lucy's desperately seeks
  • 00:25:53
    her approval yet Lucy's dispassionate
  • 00:25:56
    reply makes us wonder whether she is
  • 00:25:58
    completely committed to him again here
  • 00:26:01
    I've mentioned complex sentence I've
  • 00:26:03
    mentioned monosyllabic language okay
  • 00:26:06
    which is a language technique
  • 00:26:09
    and I mentioned how this shows them okay
  • 00:26:11
    this um illustrates again the shift in
  • 00:26:14
    their power summer calls the one that's
  • 00:26:15
    like really you know Keen he really
  • 00:26:18
    wants her to like him whilst Lucy just
  • 00:26:20
    you know she's like okay yeah fine we'll
  • 00:26:22
    get married now here's the link
  • 00:26:24
    as a result Lucy within this part of the
  • 00:26:26
    extract appears to dominate their
  • 00:26:28
    relationship so Michael seems besotted
  • 00:26:31
    obsessed in love and she appears almost
  • 00:26:34
    indifferent that's my link back to the
  • 00:26:36
    question finally as the extract draws to
  • 00:26:38
    a close there seems to be an emotional
  • 00:26:40
    disconnect in their relationship so
  • 00:26:41
    Michael feels confused and uncertain yet
  • 00:26:43
    Lucy is Overjoyed about his proposal
  • 00:26:46
    that's my
  • 00:26:48
    point for this paragraph let's have a
  • 00:26:50
    look at the evidence
  • 00:26:52
    Sir Michael does not feel Joy
  • 00:26:55
    only disappointment so joy and evidence
  • 00:26:57
    and disappointment are my bits of
  • 00:26:59
    evidence nonetheless Lucy is excited to
  • 00:27:02
    experience no more dependence no more
  • 00:27:03
    drudgery second bit of evidence or third
  • 00:27:05
    bit of evidence now I'm using Lucy
  • 00:27:08
    here's my explanation
  • 00:27:10
    the writer uses oxymoron to show Sir
  • 00:27:13
    Michael's conflicting feelings yet the
  • 00:27:15
    listing in Lucy's language conveys her
  • 00:27:17
    contentment oxymoron is language listing
  • 00:27:20
    structure we as readers realize Sir
  • 00:27:23
    Michael and Lucy cannot read each other
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    well they seem to have misunderstood
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    each other again now this explanation
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    I'm basically saying number one here's
  • 00:27:31
    my language and structure technique but
  • 00:27:32
    also when it comes to the relationship
  • 00:27:33
    they actually can't really tell what the
  • 00:27:35
    other is thinking right Lucy's like oh
  • 00:27:37
    I'm really happy at marrying this guy so
  • 00:27:39
    Michael's even thinking does she even
  • 00:27:40
    like me that's the main point I'm making
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    in this pill paragraph accordingly Broad
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    and successfully portrays a huge
  • 00:27:47
    emotional gap between sir Marco and Lucy
  • 00:27:49
    they appear to have misunderstood each
  • 00:27:51
    other's intent that's my link back to
  • 00:27:52
    the question now I finish off with a
  • 00:27:55
    conclusion finishing off
  • 00:27:58
    um quite strong
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    in conclusion it's clear that lucians
  • 00:28:03
    and Michael's relationship goes against
  • 00:28:04
    what we would expect as readers even if
  • 00:28:06
    at first Samuel appears to dominate
  • 00:28:08
    their relationship by the end it is Lucy
  • 00:28:10
    who seems to be in the driving seat so
  • 00:28:12
    Michael seems eager for her to accept
  • 00:28:14
    his marriage proposal although Lucy is
  • 00:28:16
    happy to marry him we can see she does
  • 00:28:17
    not have the same level of passion as he
  • 00:28:20
    does that's my conclusion basically
  • 00:28:22
    saying okay at first the relationship
  • 00:28:24
    looks like this but actually as the
  • 00:28:25
    passage progresses we can see that
  • 00:28:27
    um contrary to what we thought Lucy is
  • 00:28:30
    the one that seems to have way more
  • 00:28:31
    power even if she's poorer while Sir
  • 00:28:32
    Michael is the one who's kind of begging
  • 00:28:34
    for her okay so that's hard to respond
  • 00:28:36
    to this question
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