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hello and welcome now no a number of you
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guys who follow this channel are
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actually sitting the Edexcel English
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language and English Literature Exam
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syllabus as opposed to AQA or the other
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exam boards so what I wanted to do was
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to offer you guys a complete walkthrough
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of how to answer section A of the
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language paper one exam and more
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specifically I want to show you how you
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can answer the 2021 Edexcel language
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paper one exam and as I mentioned this
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is going to be a complete walkthrough
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for questions one to four so remember
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when it comes to section A in the
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edexole language paper one exam you
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always get just one insert okay you're
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given one text to look at and analyze
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and also talk about an answer for the
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first four questions before you move on
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to section B which is the imaginative
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writing question where you've got a
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choice of two questions okay one of them
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is just a statement the other is an
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image you pick one don't do both and
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then you answer the questions based on
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that so what I wanted to do was to give
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you guys a complete walkthrough of how
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to answer the 2021 exam and if you do
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want to also download a copy of this
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past paper I've also included it in the
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link below okay you can download it for
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free and you can also use it if you want
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to practice and apply some of this
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information the model answers that I've
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written to your own private practice
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okay so let's get into how to answer
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these questions okay I'm literally gonna
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walk you through literally my thought
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process as I read the insert and then of
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course how you can write model responses
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and what the model sponsors look like
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for questions one two three and four
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so let's tackle this language paper one
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past paper so obviously remember that
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you always get just one fiction extract
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and then you've got to answer four
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questions based on that and then your
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fifth or sixth question okay so you get
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a choice with imaginative writing you
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then need to write a creative story or
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something based on the image okay now
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let's look at this extract okay the
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insert that you are given and I'll kind
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of walk you through my thought process
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before reading this insert I'm not going
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to start with the questions because I've
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actually prepared these questions okay
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so then I'm going to show you the actual
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model responses that are prepared for
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all four questions related to this
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insert however what I want to do is
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Begin by reading through this insert and
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then diving into the responses for all
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five questions now remember of course as
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I mentioned you get one extract it's
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made up it's a fiction extract
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and then you need to read that with um
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you know the questions in mind at the
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back of your mind but also as you're
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reading through it you're thinking okay
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so what really stands out okay when
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you're thinking about also language and
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structure what stands out structurally
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how we're supposed to feel as readers
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okay so you're always given a blurb and
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a little bit of context at the opening
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of the extract okay in this case we're
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told in this extract Sir Michael orderly
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a rich baronet okay there's a star here
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meaning that this is a word that the
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examiners don't expect you to know what
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it means so you are given the meaning
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here so it's a title like a lord
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indicating his rich and a man in high
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position in society okay so here going
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back to this in the section Sir Michael
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audlia Rich baronet has just asked Lucy
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another character to marry him he has
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fallen in love with her despite the fact
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that she comes from a poorer background
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and as much younger than him he wants
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her to marry him for love not for his
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wealth and his place in society so this
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is interesting this is kind of I guess a
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story about class about this man who is
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evidently quite Rich whilst he hopes
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that this woman that he's in love with
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um loves him back not based on his money
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but actually she generally loves him so
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uh this is the name of the book lady
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orderly secret Mary Elizabeth Braden
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okay so this is the surname of the
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author when you're writing about the
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author or the writer effect you could
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either say the writer the author or you
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can refer to their surname never the
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first name but their surname so let's
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have a look
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she did not remove her gaze from the
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darkening Countryside but so for some
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moments was quite silent interesting
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pathetic fallacy from the opening okay
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so pathetic fallacy here it's darkening
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is it supposed to establish a negative
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mood
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then turning to him with a sudden
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passion in her manner that lighted up
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her face with a new and wonderful Beauty
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which the baronet perceived even in the
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glowing growing Twilight she fell on her
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knees at his feet okay so this is a very
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dramatic reaction and again pathetic
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fallacy is mentioned twice darkening
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Countryside but also this idea of
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Twilight this weird time during the day
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where it's kind of dark but also not too
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dark okay kind of like 4 or 5 p.m in the
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evening so here she's thinking this
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woman okay so presumably Lucy she's
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thinking and then she's reacting really
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really dramatically to um you know maybe
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what she's been told
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no Lucy no no he cried
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vehemently not hair not hair again
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vehemently is another new word so you
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just quickly look at the glossary
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vehemently means speaking with passion
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and intensity
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not hair not hair
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yes hair hair she said the strange
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passion which agitated her making her
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voice sound shrill and piercing not loud
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but distinct here and nowhere else how
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good you are how Noble how generous so
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here she's basically speaking in a very
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assertive way and she's also flattering
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this guy
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love you why the women 100 times my
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superiors and beauty and in goodness who
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might love you dearly but you ask too
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much of me interesting so she's saying
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um you're asking too much of me again
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presumably maybe she's saying oh
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um you want me to marry you that's
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asking too much
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remember what my life has been only
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remember that from my very babyhood I've
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never seen anything but poverty so she's
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telling him that she's always being poor
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my father was a gentleman clever
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accomplished handsome but poor and what
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a pitiful wretch poverty made of him my
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mother but don't do not let me speak of
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her poverty trials and vexations again
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vexations is another word that we're not
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supposed to be familiar with it means
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worries so she's basically saying that
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her parents as well as her struggled
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with poverty since she was a baby
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poverty trials vexations humiliations
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deprivations
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you cannot tell you who are among those
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for whom life is so smooth and easy you
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can never guess what is endured by such
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as we do not ask too much of me then I
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cannot be disinterested
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I cannot be blind to the advantages of
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such a marriage I cannot I cannot so
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she's basically saying look I understand
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that you know you're quite rich and
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someone like me who's really poor I
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literally you know it would be a massive
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advantage to me to marry you but what
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she's basically saying here and this is
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what I'd be thinking as I'm reading
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through this is she's kind of reluctant
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to marry him because she feels like
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maybe he's too good for her
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Beyond her agitation and a passion
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passionate vehements there is an
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undefined something in her manner which
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fills the baronet with a vague alarm so
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the baronet is like oh she can accept my
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proposal
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she is still on the ground at his feet
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crouching rather than kneeling
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her thin white dress cling about her her
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pale hair streaming over her shoulders
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her great blue eyes glittering in the
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dusk more pathetic fallacy and her hands
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clutching at the black ribbon around her
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throat as if it had been strangling her
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do not ask too much of me she kept
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repeating so she's basically saying look
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you're asking too much of Me by asking
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me to marry you I've been selfish for my
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babyhood
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Lucy Lucy speak plainly do you dislike
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me so here we can see that there's it's
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really interesting so even if Lucy
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initially falls on her knees basically
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kind of begging him and an issue we
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think that okay so there's a clear power
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difference between them okay so Lucy's
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the one that's kind of begging him
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actually she's the one that seems to be
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having way more power than this baronet
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because he's now speaking and he's like
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oh my gosh do you like me okay so this
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is shown through this dialogue just like
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you no no but is there anyone else whom
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you love she laughed aloud at this
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question I do not love anyone else in
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this world she answered he was glad of
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her reply and yet that and the strange
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laugh Jarred upon his feelings so here
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we can now see that the baronet this guy
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Sir Michael Audley is desperate for her
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to just give him something more please
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tell me that you like me okay so here
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there's an interesting power shift
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that's very subtle
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he was silent for some moments and then
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said with the kind of effort well Lucy I
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will not ask too much of you I dare say
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I'm an old romantic fool but if you do
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not dislike me and if you do not love
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anyone else I see no reason why we
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should not make a very happy couple is
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it a bargain Lucy so here he's begging
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her he's basically saying look I'm old
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you know I understand that maybe I'm not
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as sprightly and as handsome as some of
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these other guys that you'll you know
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that might be after you but I really
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want you to marry me again we can see
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that he's kind of been reduced to
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position of begging even if she's the
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one that's on her knees okay so there's
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um the author is kind of reversing some
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of our assumptions
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yes the baronet lifted her in her arms
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and kissed her once upon the forehead
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then quietly bitten her good night he
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walked straight out of the house so she
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gives him a very brief monosyllabic
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response she's not like you know she
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doesn't seem extremely excited about
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marrying this really rich guy who's
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clearly gonna change her social status
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and her position in society
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he walked straight out of the house this
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foolish old man because there was some
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strong emotion at work in his wrist
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neither Joy nor Triumph but something
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almost akin to disappointment some
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stifled and unsatisfied longing which
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lay heavy and dull in his heart as if he
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had carried a corpse in his bosom so
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this is an interesting simile he even if
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she says yes he kind of still doesn't
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feel convinced and he feels like almost
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these feelings of Happiness are dead in
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his heart
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he carried the corpse alliteration of
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that hope which had died at the sound of
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Lucy's words there's a lot of death
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imagery here and it's the death of his
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hope he's basically like oh I don't know
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if she likes me
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all the doubts and fears and timid
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aspirations were ended now he must be
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contented like other men of his age to
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be married for his fortune and his
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position so he's basically realizing
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maybe she doesn't really like me
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genuinely and even if she's saying yes I
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don't know whether she actually
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genuinely likes me for who I am
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Lucy Graham went slowly up the stairs to
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her little room at the top of the house
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she placed her dim Candle on the chest
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of drawers and seated herself on the
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edge of the white bed still and white as
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the draperies hanging around her so now
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we're left focusing in and zooming in on
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Lucy
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no more dependents no more drudgery no
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more humiliation so he's now thinking
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about actually now I'm gonna marry this
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guy I don't have to endure all of these
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terrible things I tend to have to put up
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with because I'm poor
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every trace of the old life melted away
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every clue to Identity buried and
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forgotten except these except these
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she'll never taken a left hand from the
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black ribbon at her throat she drew it
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from a bosom and now she spoke looked at
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the object attached to it okay
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interesting there's an object attached
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to this black ribbon around her throat
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it was neither a locket a miniature nor
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a cross it was a ring wrapped in an
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oblong piece of paper the paper partly
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written partly printed yellow with age
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and crumpled with much folding so this
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final bit here is interesting in the
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sense that she looks at this ring and we
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wonder okay
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um it seems like maybe was she reluctant
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because this ring is perhaps attached to
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somebody else who she really wanted to
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marry or is this ring related to you
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know maybe someone who should made a
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promise and she kind of feels terrible
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about breaking this promise we don't
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know but this ending is interesting and
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of course this extract what I'd be
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thinking of is we can see here at first
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we think that it's Lucy that has all of
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the um or rather it's Sir Michael
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orderly the rich guy he has all of the
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power but actually and it's even
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emphasized by the fact that Lucy you
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know is begging him on her knees and
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also it's emphasized by the fact that
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she emphasis she talks about how poor
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she is however as the passage progresses
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we actually see that he really really
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wants to marry her okay there's this
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shift in power actually it seems like
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it's Lucy who's like okay yes she speaks
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in very monosyllabic way and he still
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lives in a very uncertain sense okay so
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there's also also maybe uh um
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miscommunication between the two of them
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okay so we can also see that maybe
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they're not quite good at communicating
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quite clearly so obviously we can see
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towards the end she definitely is happy
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to marry him
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however she's also contemplating this
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ring so we we're kind of left on a bit
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of a cliffhanger wondering oh actually
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is this ring belonging to somebody else
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has she made a promise to somebody else
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we don't know okay so as I mentioned
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this is the insert that goes with this
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paper and let's have a look at the
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answers the model responses are prepared
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for this particular exam paper Okay so
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let's start with question number one
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which is nice and brief worth one Mark
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we'll ask the cat lines one to four and
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identify a word or phrase that shows
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that the extract takes place as the Sun
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is setting as I mentioned there's lots
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of pathetic fallacy and here we've got
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darkening Countryside as well as top
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Twilight so I just decided to select
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darkening Countryside that's really it
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when it comes to answering this question
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number one but let's have a look at
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question number two so here you also
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look at lines 10 to 14 okay so basically
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around this part of the extract and
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you're asked to discuss or to mention
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two things that the reader learns about
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Lucy's early life so this has been
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basically where she's talking about you
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know how difficult her early life was
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she's talking about also her dad her mom
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and how just their lives were you know
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their lives were really really difficult
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as a result of their poverty so again
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keeping question number two fairly brief
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as is just worth two Marks here you're
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asked to either use your own words or
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quotations so I've decided to use my own
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words she was really poor and her father
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struggled with poverty and that's really
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it for questions one and two so let's
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move on to look at my response for
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question number three
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so let's look at how to answer question
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number three this is the language and
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structure question firstly make sure you
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are extremely crystal clear on the
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difference between language and
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structure okay if you're not clear on
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all the different language techniques
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and structural techniques I suggest you
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watch the video or I'll go over this
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okay but remember language relates to
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stuff like just the basic building
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blocks of language and English Okay
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nouns verbs adjectives adverbs but also
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language techniques like similes
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metaphor alliteration pathetic fallacy
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structure relates to for example how
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there's a um extract to begin how is it
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like in the middle how does it end
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structure also relates to things like
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sentence types it relates to things like
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repetition and listing okay so let's
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have a look at this and of course in
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this instance you asked to look at just
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lines 28 to 42 and as I mentioned I've
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actually pre-prepared this so what I
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want to do is just walk you through this
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okay so it's basically from here within
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the extract all the way to
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line 42. so this paragraph Okay so we're
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asked to talk about how the white uses
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language and structure to show Sir
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Michael's thoughts and feelings about
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Lucian as I mentioned here literally I
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would suggest have two paragraphs two
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pill paragraphs one language and one
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structure as this is worth just six
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marks so let's have a look
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firstly so Michael appears to have
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conflicting thoughts and feelings about
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Lucy whilst he is elated happy to
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discover that she has no other male
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suitors so no other men who want to
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marry her
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he seems dejected which means sad that
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she does not match his emotional
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intensity okay that's my opening point
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where you're writing an opening Point
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try to
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um write more than one sentence and of
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course making it clear that you're
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relating it back to the keywords in the
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question which as I mentioned try to
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highlight here and then know what you're
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going for okay this is my opening point
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I'm basically saying that so Michael is
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sad he's dejected okay
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here's my evidence he is both glad of
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her reply and jot that's my evidence
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I've embedded two little bits of
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evidence here the contradictory
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adjectives the opposite adjectives
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language glad and Jarred indicate he
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feels confused by her he feels strongly
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for Lucy hence he may sense that her
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emotions do not match his this is my
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explanation where I'm talking about
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language techniques adjectives and how
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we can see Sir Michael's thoughts and
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feelings about Lucy are being emphasized
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so that's my language point now linking
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back to the question thus it's clear
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that Sir Michael's thoughts and feelings
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about Lucy clash as he has mixed
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emotions okay that's my opening peel
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paragraph and I've talked about language
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however I need to also balance this
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discussion with structure so this is now
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where I'm going to talk about it in my
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second pill paragraph
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additionally he holds pessimistic
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thoughts and feelings about Lucy as he
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appears to doubt her commitment he seems
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uncertain as he leaves her again this is
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my opening Point as you can see I've
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added two sentences in fact he carried
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the corpse of Hope as he left her this
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is my evidence of embedded the quotation
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this complex sentence structure vividly
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conveys the death of Sir Michael's hopes
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as he seems uncertain as to whether Lucy
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will require his love whether she's
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going to return his love
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Braden's use of a metaphors have also
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mixed in a little bit of language okay
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you don't always have to just keep it
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strictly to language and structure you
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can also mix it up as I've done here but
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make sure you always mention language
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and structure in your paragraphs so that
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you can be answering both parts of the
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question so Brandon's uses a metaphor
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alluding to a corpse indicates that
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Michael is resigned as he senses Lucy
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May reject him when he next sees her
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that's my explanation consequently or
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rather I've actually repeated
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consequently okay so consequently it's
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evident that Sir Michael is despairing
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he's sad his thoughts and feelings about
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Lucy are cynical as he may not know
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where he stands with her so that's my
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link back to the question one basically
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saying how Sir Michael feels about Lucy
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he feels like you know maybe she's
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rejecting him he doesn't he feels like
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quite negative towards how she feels
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about him he he's kind of like left on
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tender hooks a little bit okay he's not
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sure so that's really how to answer
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question number three go for two people
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paragraphs if it's easier keep one
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strict kitchen language one strictly to
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structure you can mix both but make sure
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you always mention language and
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structure otherwise you're not answering
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the full question and you're not going
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to give yourself access or the
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opportunity to answer it in forward in a
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way where you're going to get the full
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marks okay the four six marks
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let's look at how to approach question
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number four so in this question which is
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worth 15 marks you're asked to talk
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about or rather this is the evaluation
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question okay you're asked to evaluate
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whatever statement you're given okay so
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as we can see in this question you're
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told and this extract is an attempt to
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show the relationship between Lucy and
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Sir Michael okay keywords is what's the
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relationship like Lucy and Sir Michael
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evaluate how successful this is achieved
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remember evaluation means you're firstly
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saying how successful is the author in
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showing this relationship between Lucy
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and son Michael I would say it's not an
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argument to say the author does this
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effectively but also when you're
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evaluating you're talking about it in
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relation to language and structure I
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keep on talking about language and
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structure it's really important to know
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the distinction between the two because
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it also applies not only to question
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number three but also question number
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four this evaluation question so let's
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have a look at how I've approached it
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okay
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so as you can see here for this 15
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marker I actually start with an
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introduction in terms of how the
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relationship between Lucy and Sir
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Michael is shown to just sum it up okay
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see interest and conclusions is not
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completely essential to your essay
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however it's almost like the icing on
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the cake okay you're kind of tying a bow
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and really bringing this to your
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examiner and showing look I have like a
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really strong handle of this extract so
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let's look at the introduction
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the extract depicts an intriguing
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relationship dynamic between Lucy and
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Sir Michael at first they appear to
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follow what we would expect as Lucy
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seems weaker and subservient to so my
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course observient means obedient given
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her lower status yet by the end the
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power appears to shift to Lucy as Sir
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Michael's hope seem pinned on her
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decision this goes back to what I was
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talking about with this extract where at
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first Lucy seems to be kind of um on her
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knees she is the one that's poorer but
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actually as a passage progresses it
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seems like he's the one who actually is
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really desperate for her um attention
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he's the one that's desperate for her
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approval okay and that's literally what
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of summarized hair okay that's already
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adding some analytical depth in my
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response let's look at the first peel
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paragraph remember all my paragraphs
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always structure them as Point evidence
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explanation link so let's have a look
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at the opening of the extract Lucy looks
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subservient again obedient as she kneels
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before Sir Michael her physical kneeling
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clearly indicates her lower social
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status and we assume Sir Michael
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controls this relationship that's my
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opening Point relating it back to the
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keywords in the question remember and
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note how much I use these keywords it's
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not you're not over repeating yourself
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when you're repeating some of these
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keywords you really clearly indicating
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the examiner I understand what this
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assignment has asked me to do
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in fact she fell on her knees yet sir
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Michael commanded no Lucy no that's my
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evidence and hair actually in my
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evidence I am juxtaposing two different
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bits okay she fell on her knees but also
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when he basically said no Lucy no
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because when you're writing about these
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characters and talking about like their
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relationship sometimes a powerful way to
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do this is to talk about what does one
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character say versus what does another
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character say okay that's what I've done
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the verb feel reveals to us how Meek and
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deferential Lucy is as you can see I'm
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using ambitious language deferential
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obedient Meek means like kind of calm a
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little bit shy
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moreover Sir Michael's emphatic
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repetition of no repetition structure
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so I've used language verb and now
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repetition structure shows he is used to
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commanding her
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from the outset of the extract from the
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start of the extract whereas readers get
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the impression that Sir Michael controls
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and dominates their relationship as you
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can see here in my explanation I've
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talked about language verb structure
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repetition but also I've then emphasized
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and analyzed what does this show about
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Lucy and Sir Michael what I'm saying
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here is that actually it seems like Lucy
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at first she's used to being obedient
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she's just being the servant and so
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Michael also the way he speaks to her
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he's just basically instructing her
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telling her what to do now linking back
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to the question hence
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going to the next page
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Braden so I can say the author the
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writer or the surname so in this case
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I've decided to use her surname Braden
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successfully depicts a vast power
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difference in Lucy and Sir Michael's
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relationship at first we get the
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impression that Lucy is quite powerless
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this is my link back to the question now
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here's my second peel paragraph
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nonetheless as the extract progresses
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there seems to be a shift in their
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relationship we've gradually discovered
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that so Michael is desperate to marry
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Lucy and he's very
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self-deprecating self-deprecating means
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like you know um you're almost like
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making fun of yourself in order to make
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yourself more likeable to someone else
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okay you're kind of putting yourself
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down so this is my second opening point
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I'm working through the extract okay so
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I started off here I'm now working
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through the extract
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he wonders
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do you dislike me yet Lucy reassures him
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by affirming dislike you no no here's my
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evidence again I'm juxtaposing what he
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says versus what Lucy says look at my
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explanation
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however so Michael is still unsure and
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he calls himself a romantic thought in
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fact actually I've added three separate
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bits of evidence you've got he asked you
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just like me she then says just like you
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know and then this is a third bit of
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evidence a romantic fool so here's my
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evidence now let's look at my
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explanation
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Braden's use of dialogue okay so this is
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technique dialogue is effective in
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Shifting The Power Balance
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so Michael seems insecure and uncertain
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and although Braden employs High
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performer in Lucy's reply remember hyper
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4 is when you ask a question and
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immediately answer it
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so although Brighton employs High
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Performance and Lucy's reply to convey
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her interest the adjective old shows us
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some Michael thinks he is not good
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enough for Lucy just be clear by the way
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high performer is Lucy she asked dislike
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you that's the question then she
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immediately answered it no no okay
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that's a structural technique
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the shift surprises us because Lucy has
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so much to gain from this marriage
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that's my explanation talked about
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dialogue talked about her before I've
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also mentioned adjectives so this is
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really heavy in both language and
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structure analysis this is my
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explanation now linking back to the
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question
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thus the author shows Lucy and Sir
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Michael's relationship changes Lucy
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appears to wield to hold far more power
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as Sir Michael begs her to love and
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marry him that's my second peel
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paragraph let's have a look at my third
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pill point
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furthermore Lucia pierced to accept his
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proposal yet her lack lost a reply
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reveals so Michael loves her more than
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she loves him in their relationship
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lackluster means there's not that much
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enthusiasm
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so Michael Speaks continuously as he
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tries to justify how they would make a
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very happy couple so that's my opening
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point this is my evidence now this is my
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explanation oh actually this is even a
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bit more of evidence nonetheless Lucy
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simply replies yes okay so Sir Michael
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he says evidence one they can make a
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very happy couple but Lucy replies yes
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Brandon depicts Sir Michael speaking in
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a complex sentence this contrasts Lucy's
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monosyllabic reply where's readers can
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see that Sir Michael is extremely
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committed to Lucy's desperately seeks
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her approval yet Lucy's dispassionate
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reply makes us wonder whether she is
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completely committed to him again here
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I've mentioned complex sentence I've
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mentioned monosyllabic language okay
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which is a language technique
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and I mentioned how this shows them okay
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this um illustrates again the shift in
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their power summer calls the one that's
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like really you know Keen he really
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wants her to like him whilst Lucy just
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you know she's like okay yeah fine we'll
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get married now here's the link
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as a result Lucy within this part of the
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extract appears to dominate their
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relationship so Michael seems besotted
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obsessed in love and she appears almost
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indifferent that's my link back to the
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question finally as the extract draws to
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a close there seems to be an emotional
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disconnect in their relationship so
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Michael feels confused and uncertain yet
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Lucy is Overjoyed about his proposal
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that's my
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point for this paragraph let's have a
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look at the evidence
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Sir Michael does not feel Joy
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only disappointment so joy and evidence
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and disappointment are my bits of
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evidence nonetheless Lucy is excited to
00:27:02
experience no more dependence no more
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drudgery second bit of evidence or third
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bit of evidence now I'm using Lucy
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here's my explanation
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the writer uses oxymoron to show Sir
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Michael's conflicting feelings yet the
00:27:15
listing in Lucy's language conveys her
00:27:17
contentment oxymoron is language listing
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structure we as readers realize Sir
00:27:23
Michael and Lucy cannot read each other
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well they seem to have misunderstood
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each other again now this explanation
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I'm basically saying number one here's
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my language and structure technique but
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also when it comes to the relationship
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they actually can't really tell what the
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other is thinking right Lucy's like oh
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I'm really happy at marrying this guy so
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Michael's even thinking does she even
00:27:40
like me that's the main point I'm making
00:27:43
in this pill paragraph accordingly Broad
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and successfully portrays a huge
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emotional gap between sir Marco and Lucy
00:27:49
they appear to have misunderstood each
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other's intent that's my link back to
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the question now I finish off with a
00:27:55
conclusion finishing off
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um quite strong
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in conclusion it's clear that lucians
00:28:03
and Michael's relationship goes against
00:28:04
what we would expect as readers even if
00:28:06
at first Samuel appears to dominate
00:28:08
their relationship by the end it is Lucy
00:28:10
who seems to be in the driving seat so
00:28:12
Michael seems eager for her to accept
00:28:14
his marriage proposal although Lucy is
00:28:16
happy to marry him we can see she does
00:28:17
not have the same level of passion as he
00:28:20
does that's my conclusion basically
00:28:22
saying okay at first the relationship
00:28:24
looks like this but actually as the
00:28:25
passage progresses we can see that
00:28:27
um contrary to what we thought Lucy is
00:28:30
the one that seems to have way more
00:28:31
power even if she's poorer while Sir
00:28:32
Michael is the one who's kind of begging
00:28:34
for her okay so that's hard to respond
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to this question
