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in this video I'm going to share with
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you 100 real band 7 8 and 9 essays these
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essays have been marked by real ex IELTS
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examiners and the students that wrote
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them all went on to get either about 7 8
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or 9 in the real test but our goal is
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not to just give you a bunch of essays
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our goal is to help you improve your
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writing score so on top of giving you
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these essays what we're going to do is
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do two more things that are going to
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help you improve your writing scores
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using these essays so we're going to
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first show you what not to do when using
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these sample essays number two most
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students are unaware of great strategies
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and techniques that they can use so
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we're going to share with you 10
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strategies that you can use that will
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help you use these samples to improve
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your writing skills and improve your
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rating score to make sure that we're
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only helping the students that want help
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and want to improve you will only get
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access to to these essays by watching
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the whole video there is no special link
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to click we're going to show you in the
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whole video how to access these sample
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essays so let's start off with five
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don'ts these are five things that you
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should not do when using any IELTS
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sample essays number one is the most
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common one which is don't use fake
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sample essays I say that more than 95
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percent of the supposed band line essays
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that you'll find online are not anywhere
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near band 9 and if you are reading and
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copying people that have never even got
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close to the score that you're hoping to
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get then you're learning lots of bad
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habits but don't worry we've solved that
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for you by giving you these real sample
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essays we'll show you how to get those
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in the rest of the video number two
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don't just pick up the essay read it and
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think that you will magically through
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osmosis become better at writing you
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cannot read an essay and become better
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at writing by just passively reading it
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I think a lot of people have been
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convinced that all you have to do is
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read the essay and some magic thing will
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happen in your brain and you will
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improve that is simply not going to
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happen if you don't believe me think
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back to last month when the World Cup
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was on I think something more than a
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billion people watch the World Cup final
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were any of those people better at
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football after the World Cup final after
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watching two of the greatest footballers
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that have ever lived no you would think
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that that's ridiculous but thousands of
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students every single month fail the
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test because they believe all they have
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to do is just read lots and lots of
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sample essays it is not going to help
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you but the good news is we're going to
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give you these 10 strategies these 10
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techniques that will actually help you
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in the rest of this video another thing
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that you should not do is look at the
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essays and try and figure out why you're
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better than these students in some way
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or why these students are not good or
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these students are not high level let me
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tell you a little story about a trick
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that I used to play on my students in
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the British Council so on the first day
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of a new IELTS class with new students
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what I would do is I would give them
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band Six essays Bond seven essays Bond
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eight essays and ban nine essays and I
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wouldn't tell them which were which and
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I would put them around the room and I'd
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ask the students to go and look at these
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essays and give them a score and every
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single time and this is like hundreds
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and hundreds of students every single
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time they thought the band Six was band
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9 and they thought the band 9 was band
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Six
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you are a student you are not an IELTS
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examiner if you had the knowledge of an
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IELTS examiner you wouldn't be watching
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this video most students look at a bond
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6 essay which normally has lots of
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complicated words and complex language
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and think that it is very very high
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level most students look at band 9
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essays and think that they are low level
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band 9 essays are actually quite simple
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and easy to understand and very very
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clear most students look at bonds seven
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essays and think there's lots of grammar
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mistakes there's lots of vocabulary
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mistakes this must be a really low level
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student band 7 essays have mistakes in
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them please do not waste your time and
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your energy trying to find out why you
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think these are not good if you were an
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expert you wouldn't be watching this
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video the fourth thing that you should
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not do is look for things that you can
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copy from these essays and there's a
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very simple reason for that number one
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you are not doing a memorization test I
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know many of you come from educational
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backgrounds where the emphasis in your
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education system is just on memorizing
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things and that's how they test
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intelligence this is not a memorization
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test this is a writing in English test
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this is a can you communicate clearly an
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English test you cannot memorize words
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and phrases and chunks of essays and
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hope to just put those in on test day
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and get a higher score that is not how
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it works you can use these to improve
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your grammar and your vocabulary and
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we'll show you how to do that in the
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rest of the video but don't just
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memorize them it is not going to help
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you and number five this might sound
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really silly but a lot of students do
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this do not copy the entire essay and
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put it in to your response on test day a
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lot of students believe that if they
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copy a high level essay and then just
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put it in no matter what the question is
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that they're magically going to get a
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high score I don't know why students do
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this but they do please do not do this I
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don't want to be responsible for
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students failing the test so please
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please please do not do those five
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things it is a waste of your time and it
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is a waste of money these days the IELTS
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costs a lot of money don't throw it away
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by using these incorrectly but there are
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now 10 ways that we're going to show you
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that you can use them correctly to
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improve your rating skills and improve
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your rating score so this is how to find
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the 100 sample essays on our website
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I've purposely hidden them so that only
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students that are serious about getting
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the scores that they need will find them
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first thing you want to do is go to
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Google and type in IELTS writing task 2.
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it will bring up a list of different
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websites and what you want to do is find
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the IELTS Advantage One it might be
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number one it might be somewhere on this
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page just click on the IELTS Advantage
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one that should bring you to this page
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on our website ieltsrading task 2 in
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2023 that's step one now I continue to
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watch the video and I'll show you in
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step two how to find the essays so I'm
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going to give you these 10 things that
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you can do these 10 techniques but you
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don't have to use all 10 of them what I
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would recommend doing is watching them
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all I'm picking the one that you think
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is your biggest weakness that's what you
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should always start with not just for
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writing but for all areas of the test
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don't work on things that you're already
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comfortable doing don't work on your
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strengths work on your weaknesses I know
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that's tough and I know as human beings
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we don't like to do difficult things but
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this is the best way for you to pass the
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test as quickly as possible and then
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move on with your life when you never
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have to think about this silly test
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again so I'm going to go through these
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10 now watch them all and then pick the
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ones that you think are most difficult
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for you or you think that you need to
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work the most on so the first thing that
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we're going to teach you is how to use
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sample essays for improving your idea
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generation a lot of students really
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struggle with this area and once you
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start to see what real band 7809 ideas
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look like it removes a lot of the stress
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because what you will notice is most of
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them are a lot simpler than you think
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you don't get extra marks for coming up
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with complex ideas you get extra marks
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for thinking of ideas that answer the
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question that are relevant to the
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question and most of the time these are
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going to be simple ideas so the first
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thing that you can do to improve your
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idea generation is don't look at the
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answer to the question don't look look
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at the actual essay take each one and
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cover up the actual essay and just look
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at the question and what we've done here
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is we've limited the number of questions
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we're giving you like a hundred essays
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but I think there are only like 10
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questions
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um so that will mean that you see a wide
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variety of different ideas so what
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you're going to do is you're going to
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look at the questions
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and think of ideas yourself so what I
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would recommend doing is not
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brainstorming what I would recommend
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doing is simply look at the question and
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think what is the simplest idea that
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answers this question what is the most
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obvious idea the most straightforward
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idea if I asked a hundred people this
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question what would be the most popular
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answer and if you write down a few of
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them and then look at the answer
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identify the main ideas they will
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normally be in the introduction in and
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they will be in the main body paragraph
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and they will be normally in the
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conclusion identify those main ideas and
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then compare with your ideas if you're
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getting similar ideas to these students
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the garban seven eight and nine then
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you're probably on the right track if
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you have different ideas that doesn't
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mean that you're wrong doesn't mean that
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your ideas aren't relevant but think
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about whether they are relevant or not
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are you getting different ideas because
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they're just different relevant ideas or
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think about whether your ideas are
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relevant or not if they're you think
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about them and you compare them and
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you're like actually my ideas are
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completely irrelevant that might mean
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that you didn't understand the questions
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you have to work on that more or it
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could mean that you're just complicating
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everything and making your ideas way
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more complicated than they need to be so
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that's Technique One the second thing
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that you can work on would be idea
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development so so this is taking ideas
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and developing them into main body
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paragraphs so step one look at the
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question understand the question and
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then identify the main ideas so for this
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person focus on their careers idea
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number one and
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have more time for themselves
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idea number two so there's two benefits
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two advantages here and then what you do
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is you do not
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look at the main body so you just
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identify those two main ideas and then
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what you could do on this blank piece of
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paper you could pick one so for example
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you could write an explanation you could
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write an example and then you could
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compare that with what the student has
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done in this essay so here focus on the
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careers this is because they have less
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responsibility and distractions in their
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lives compared to the couples that have
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a child so if it's the same then you're
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probably on the right track but you
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could also make this better you might
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think well I could maybe explain this a
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little bit more again you're not looking
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for exact matches what you're doing is
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thinking about what they have done and
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what you have done and this is just one
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essay you might look at five six seven
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other essays for this question and then
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look at all of the explanations and
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compare those with your explanations
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compare those with your examples and
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then that's going to help you develop
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your own the next thing you can work on
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is structure so what you can do is read
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the question read the whole essay and
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then think about the structure that they
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used so for example this is their
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introduction this is their main body
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paragraph one this is their main body
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paragraph two and this is their
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conclusion so what we're going to do
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here is discuss both views and give your
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own opinion this is the type of question
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that we're talking about here so they're
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using this four paragraph structure but
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then within each paragraph what are they
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doing so here in the first sentence what
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they have done is they have paraphrased
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the question they have given their
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opinion here
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they've talked about the first point
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here
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and they've given the reason for the
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latter point
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here
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so what you could do is look for more
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discussable views essays for example
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this one and you could compare them so
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are they using a similar structure here
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well it seems like they actually are
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they've paraphrased the question in the
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first sentence here
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they've given their opinion
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and they've said why
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they believe that here
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they are slightly different but again if
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you look at 7 8 9 10 of those you'll be
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able to see similar structures and then
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that is going to help you write your own
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structure so what you could do is
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actually go through them all if you
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wanted analyze the structures and then
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look at all of the differences between
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the different types of essays so you
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could go and look at for example here we
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have a causes and solutions essay where
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do they put the causes where do they put
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the solutions what do they put in their
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conclusion are there any similarities
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between the different students answering
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this same question and you'll start to
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learn the different structures and then
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use them yourself it's a great way to
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actually learn structures rather than
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just looking at them as if you give
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students just a bunch of structures they
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tend not to be able to use them on test
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day but if you do it this way it kind of
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internalizes it a lot better and they're
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able to use them rather than memorize
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rise them okay so when you're on this
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page what you want to do is scroll down
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there's a lot of information on this
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page so keep scrolling keep scrolling
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until you get
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to here sample essays
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now we have a lot of different options
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here continue to watch the video and I'm
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going to show you which one to click in
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step three the next thing you could do
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is work on your coherence and cohesion
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by identifying linking words or cohesive
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devices some people call them cohesive
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devices some people call them linking
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words so for example with this one you
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could identify that there are only
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really four linking words or cohesive
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devices here in other words for example
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for instance an in conclusion if you
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were to look at another 10 band 789 real
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essays and you only seen linking words
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are used very sparingly there are not
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that many then that would be a clear
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indication that that's what you should
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do most of these essays are not going to
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have lots and lots and lots of linking
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words in them because lots and lots and
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lots of linking words actually lower
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your score they don't increase it
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another thing that you could do is think
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about why
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they used
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each cohesive device so for example why
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did they use that well they were giving
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an example did they use it correctly
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well in this instance they seem to have
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that is helping you understand okay if
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I'm giving an example that's what I
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should use or you might Identify some
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linking words that they used incorrectly
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that is going to help you improve
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because identifying other people's
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mistakes is helping you improve
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your knowledge and your use of linking
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words as well remember these are real
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essays which means that they have
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mistakes in them they are not perfect
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perfect essays are not actually going to
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help you as much as real students that
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are at your level and have got the
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scores that you need and that brings us
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on to number five which is identify
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grammar mistakes as I've just said one
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of the best ways to improve is to
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identify other people's mistakes so what
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you would do is you would go through and
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highlight any mistakes that they have
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made
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so for example this one
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you could write here this is an article
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mistake
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here's another article mistake
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so by identifying these mistakes and
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correcting them you can think about the
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rules of Articles and your knowledge and
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your ability to use them correctly will
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improve not just articles but any
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mistakes so identify the mistakes and
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then think about why those mistakes were
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made or categorize the mistakes into is
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it a preposition mistake an article
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mistake a punctuation mistake and then
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you will improve too the sick thing you
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can do is also related to grammar and
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thinking about the different grammatical
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structures and tenses that were used in
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the essay on why they were used so for
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example if we take this essay
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obtaining this type of information in
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most cases means breaking the law why
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did they use obtaining Ing and breaking
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ing rather than furthermore up to obtain
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this information in most cases means to
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break the law and this will force you to
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think about whether this is correct or
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incorrect if you think that it is
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incorrect what is a better way to use it
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and why do you think that or if it's
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correct why did they use that here's
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another one however not only are
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Paparazzi hard to invade properties
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belonging to politicians take photos
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without their permission but also
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not only but also what does that not
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only but also grammatical structure
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allow this student to do why did they
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choose this grammatical structure what
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were they able to do is it correct could
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you use this grammatical structure in
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your essay again not copying it not
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blindly copying this and inserting it
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into your essay but adding tools to your
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toolbox the more tools that you have in
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your toolbox grammatically and for
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vocabulary then the better able you are
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able to build your essay on test day
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yourself number eight is vocabulary and
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improving the range of your vocabulary
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and you can do that simply by reading
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the question reading the essay and
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identifying any unknown vocabulary or
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vocabulary or collocations or phrases
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that you're unsure about you're not a
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hundred percent sure what they mean or
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how to use them in a sentence so so for
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example you might see the collocation
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discover their talents what does that
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mean to discover their talents
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here's another one potential talents
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what's the difference between
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discovering your talent and a potential
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Talent what does potential mean what
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does potential Talent as a collocation
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actually mean
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so you would note down those words or
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phrases or collocations and then you
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would guess the meaning from the context
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so you would read the whole sentence
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read the whole paragraph and try and
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guess what that word means that is going
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to help with your reading skills it's
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going to help you identify and
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understand unknown words in the reading
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test and it will also help you improve
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your vocabulary because you can take
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those new words or phrases put them into
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a vocabulary book add all the new
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information like the meaning the
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synonyms the example sentences and then
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after a while if you do this you're
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going to have a massive Bank of new
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words and new phrases and then if you
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review those and use those in your own
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essays then you're improving your
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ability to write essays another thing
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you could do with vocabulary number nine
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is identify any vocabulary errors so for
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example in this essay if we look at this
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sentence recently the pictures of a
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famous politician of Milan while playing
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football with local children were
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published in many newspapers and he
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instantly became famous so there's a
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problem here because it's saying a
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famous person became famous well they
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were already famous so either there is a
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meaning error here with this word or we
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need to change this word to something
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different another thing that you could
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do is look for repetition are there
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words that are maybe repeated a few many
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times and then you could try and change
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it to a synonym that means the same
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thing but has a different you know a
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different word that means the same thing
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and last but not least number 10 what
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you can do is look at the question write
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the whole essay and then compare your
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essays compare everything with what the
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students have done but I wouldn't
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recommend doing that right away what I
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would recommend doing is use you know
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one or two of the other nine techniques
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work on your weaknesses and then once
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you are more confident then you can
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write the whole essay and then compare
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it with what the other students have
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done and but please please please don't
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think that if your essay is different
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that it's wrong there are hundreds of
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different ways that you can write a bond
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seven or a Band-Aid essay it is not
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mathematics it is not you know there's
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only one answer to the question so don't
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look at these essays and think that
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you're on the wrong track just because
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yours are different what you're looking
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for is are the main things like the
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ideas are they relevant is the structure
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similar did you develop your ideas in a
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similar way if you focus on those big
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things then your essays will be fine and
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you will really really improve okay so
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you should be here the one that you want
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is this one how to use task 2 sample
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essays if you click on that you will get
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them it will tell you how to use them
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and then it will give you all of these
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samples so thank you very much for
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watching the video and I hope that you
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enjoy using these samples and they help
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